|
||
|
Magic Kingdom Memoirs Where dreams are buried, but not forgotten. |
My Dance |
Login or Register now to see less ads. |
|
Thread Tools | Display Modes |
#1
|
||||
|
||||
My Dance
I got up. I walked to the shower. When I got there I saw my phone ring. It was a text. From Jake. It said:
Going to the dance on friday I texted back: I don't know yet. If I can find a stunning dress then maybe... He texted back: haha very funny. You are TOO sarcastic sometimes! I texted back: Who said I was being sarcastic! He texted: Stop! r u going? I texted: If I can find a nice dress He texted back: Okay! Bi! I texted: Bi! I got in the shower and out. I wrapped a towel arond my hair. And, one more around me. I got out my tooth brush, hair brush, tooth paste, hair dryer, hair staightener. My brother's friend was over that day. I have heard he likes me. I don't know why but he does. So, brought my clothes for today in with me. I brushed my hair. Then I brushed my teeth. Blow dryed my hair. I pluged in the staightener. I put on my clothes. Bright purple short shorts. A white shirt. It had a big ranbow peace sign on it. By now the staightener should be ready. I staightened my hair. My dark red hair that I dyed. I brushed my hair one more time. Then left the bathroom. I went to my room really happy. Was Jake going to ask me to the dance? I smiled tightly. He was blonde. light blue twinkling eyes! A rounded nose. He was so nice! I looked in my mirror. My staight dark red hair sat there. It had layers. A little under my shoulders. Then a again. Why would he want to ask me? I had Hazel eyes. I went over and put my makeup on. Mascara. Purple eyeshadow. Red-Pink blush. A glitter lipgloss. I frowned. I went downstairs. Loged on thye computer. I went on AIM to see if Jake was on. He wasn't I loged off. It was the first day of summer. Summer dance at school is in a few weeks. I think there is three summer dances. I went to this one messaging site. It said in big letters: ONE NEW MESSAGE FROM MY DANCE I read the words. Who is My dance?
__________________
Hi.
Last edited by DeputyRR; 09-13-2009 at 02:03 AM.. Reason: inappropriate |
#2
|
||||
|
||||
Maybe "My Dance" is their secret admirer....
Lol, This story is pretty interesting so far! Last edited by Ms.PrincessLucy; 09-13-2009 at 09:32 PM.. |
#3
|
||||
|
||||
Sounds like the start of an interesting story, but your sentences are really choppy. Try using some adjectives and other forms of description.
|
#4
|
||||
|
||||
I wil this is just getting at little parts.
Chapter 2: I opened the letter. It read: Hi... This is My Dance! I love to dance. I got to your school. I will descibe me. You guess who I am... By replying to this message. I have dirty blonde hair. Green eyes. I KINDA like you.... KINDA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! A shy smile. I know Jake. You know me. I always use my bike. I love choclate. I like to write poems and stories. I met you once... I don't go to your school. I wrote the a poem: Like rose, I like you. I'll always miss you. Never leave me. I like you, alot. I smile when I see you. That smile means hi... I mis you....... That's it! Now, guess. I replied: Hi... I don't know... I can't guess do you like me or like me like me? He replied QUICK! I read: Like you. I might (might!!!!) ask you to the first summer dance... What are you wearing? I replied: A short dress. He replied again: HAHA! Jake told me about your sarcasim... I replied: I knew he would... I'm texting him to ask who you are... He replied: NO! I pulled out my cell. And texted Jake: Hi... Dooes anyone (of your friends) have like me or anything?
__________________
Hi.
Last edited by DeputyRR; 09-15-2009 at 02:57 AM.. Reason: inappropriate |
#5
|
||||
|
||||
I like it! KEEP WRITING
__________________
^Thanks Taylor!!!^
|
#6
|
||||
|
||||
Thanks!!!!!!!!!
__________________
Hi.
|
#7
|
||||
|
||||
It's great so far!
Keep writing if you wish! |
#8
|
||||
|
||||
ok soon one more person
__________________
Hi.
|
Thread Tools | |
Display Modes | |
|
|