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Dark magic
XD hey this is my first story with a weird plot lool!!! Ok: Alison stone walked through the boardwalk in tears,it just wasn't her night.The lights were dim everyone was asleep,Her shoes were stolen and replaced with blisters starting at her toenail to the center of her foot.she caught her purple ripped dress and fell she was just going to stay there all night and let her rot-she didn't want to be alive she wanted to be In heaven where everything was all right but a cold frost hand that send a shiver done her spine helped her up.''let-let me go she said in a weak tiny voice.''Dear,Dear who do we got here?" said the cold raspy old voice.Alison looked up and noticed the women looked 99 years old with white hair and was by a stand like many other stands except this one wasn't empty, it had black sockets with something lumpy in them she became to wonder... "What do you have in the sockets madame...".The old lady hesitated."magic dear..".Alison knew the old lady didn't like the subject."What KIND of magic?" she pressed. "Dark dear, no magic for such a young girl"."uh I'm 16 though..."."Well you look wet why don't u come to my house?" the old lady asked changing the subject ."No, I want to know more about this!" she confirmed. .
Sorry it's so long lool and srry if there another name like it I'll change it. Haha.. Sign ups:-doggy means yes, -bear means no but for now ! |
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Sounds interesting, I'd like too see more.
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This sounds like an interesting story; but may I make a suggestion?
When you are typing, you should place quotations on their own line, instead of continuing the sentence: --- Ex: "Let-let me go." She said in a weak tiny voice. "Dear, dear, who do we got here?" said the cold raspy old voice. Alison looked up and noticed the woman looked 99 years old with white hair... -- See the difference? It makes it easier to read. Besides that, once again, I would like to see more.
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