[Yazsmin]

Reading the last entry felt like you were talking at 10000 miles an hour. It lacks sentence fluency. It's an okay story, though it'd be better if I could understand it...

Let me rephrase it. And you're 15? Wow that's surprising! I thought you were much younger. Take that as a compliment, when you're older like 40, you'll wanna be considered younger.

Dear Diary,

Well, I'm back Diary! It's the same day as the last entry. Okay, my present was the BEST! I have to admit, I never thought my parents would get that for me, but they were a little dumb about it! Today I went to the doctor's office to make sure I didn't have any diseases. My parents were upset that I opened the present because it wasn't for me, it was for my cousin that really loves me. In fact, she loves me so much that she likes to be addressed by my name! However, my parents agreed that since I opened the present, I can have it. The actual reason I went to the doctor's is because my parents heard that when you make the transition from middle school to high school, it's possible to get sick. I think that's a lie, and a very dumb one at that. Luckily, I wasn't sick! Today is my cousin's birthday, and she's turning 7. So after we finished up at the doctor's, we went to Target to look at toys for her. However, all I wanted to do was use my present. We looked at Polly Pockets, Barbies, Littlest Pet Shop dolls, Puppy in my Pockets, and other toys. We finally agreed on buying her some clothes. We bought her a pink and blue blouse and some gray skinny jeans. I personally think a 7 year old would not want a blouse. Also, these pants would be more appropriate for me. Now that I think about it, why would a 7 year old want any clothes for her birthday at all? I secretly bought some candy for her. She isn't allowed to have candy, but I always buy her some when I go to her house. So we bought the stuff and went home. My mom quickly wrapped it. I got a small bag and put the candy in there, then I went and put it my purse. We drove to the party with my father. When we got there, I took Melissa (that's my cousin's real name) upstairs to her room to eat the candy. This time I bought 7 packs of candy because she is 7, I usally only buy 4. After we finished engorging ourselves in refined sugar, we went downstairs to the porch. She opened presents and when she got to my mom's she made the weirdest face. I was sitting next to her, but she happened to smile at my mom when a picture was taken. Even my dad gave my mom a glare! His glare said what-the-heck were you thinking. Every year my parents ask 'where is your present'? I always say I didn't get one, and I help my mom pay for the present. For the past 3 years, I have gotten Melissa candy for her birthday. Later we had dinner and some very delicious cake. As for this moment, I am writing to you diary. Okay, this is boring. Good-bye dumb diary!