The Quest You Don't Want To Play With This Staff Member....

[Kyris]

I might use it most likely I won't have time though.

[MyBirdHat]

Good story so far, you just need a bit more detail and some better punctuation.

And guys, please don't be too mean.. She might not have copied the other story. If she says she didn't then they probably didn't..

[Kyris]

Thank you!

[Epcotfans]

Ok not to be mean Lil_Jessie but in our reading class our teacher said "Details help paint a picture in your readers mind." so i kinda agree on details bc all i'm seeing is 1 staff member and 2 vmk players in a non-furnished tiki tiki tiki guest room

[Kyris]

yes exactly no furni

[Epcotfans]

What do the vmk players look what kind of hair does the staff member have Stories need detail!!

[bluedudeman]

If you're not able to accept comments on your story, that are trying to help you, then you shouldn't write a story.

And definetly don't shush them

[Kyris]

shush them? I was not. I was being random!