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DarknessGirl
10-19-2006, 11:13 PM
Ok, i express myself through poetry. This is one of my latest, and I know you can tell the real, from the fake. Hopefully..But here it is. Comment Please.

Her Heart::

When the heart beats
The doctor say's,
"She's alive, twas never dead"

Her eyes glazed over
Her skin cold as ice
She was never sick
But was heartbroken

He crushed her hard
He never cared
He just wanted her, never fair.

She struggled on
Always fearing
Her porcilen Heart
Would break again...

Till one day
Someone she knew
Came from a distance
And their love grew...

They minced words
They joked and Laughed
Till one day they saw

Tis' was more..
She felt safe when around him
And he, kept it that way
Whenever around...

She would smile
And forget the pain
She held inside

Her porcilen heart
Gave a beat..
He held her close,
"She's in love..
In love with me.."

- Continuation of Her Heart, There is ONE More part to the Poems. You will see.. -


His Heart::

It gave a beat..
Then one more..
He felt it grow..
When he spoke the words..

Those three words..
He said to much..
But not enough..
It touched her soul..

And he knew..
This was all
It was all..
So True..

He held her close..
He watched her smile..
He loved her more..
As every day grew..

From there on in..
Their love would grow..
His lips never faultered..
When he said..

"I Love You..."


By:: DarknessGirl

Based on events I have had happened to me, or how i felt, also its dedicated to someone.

Comment Please.

Deeda
10-19-2006, 11:34 PM
Wow. Beautiful. A couple spelling mistakes, but it's chilling to the bone and beautiful. Rock on!

sew123093
10-19-2006, 11:42 PM
i wish i could write like that

Misskayla
10-19-2006, 11:47 PM
MY LIFE STORY!!!! dude you rock...

-cries-

Goining on my UP.

Anielmz
10-19-2006, 11:48 PM
That is really good :) Whenever you said twas' I started thinking about Christmas >_< Like.. twas the night before christmas.. blah >_< lol:)
Nice poetry though

MONKYDREAMA
10-19-2006, 11:59 PM
that's really awesome

write another! :D

xXMiZ-B-BeArXx
10-20-2006, 12:00 AM
@_@ Wow... That's so beautiful.... You rock at writing :)

~ apple ~ :23:

DarknessGirl
10-20-2006, 12:04 AM
TY.
I'll Post more.

I had been cheated on, and someone new came in my life, and showed me it was ok to date again...

So yea. Thats what thats about.

- trueness of a story -

DarknessGirl
10-20-2006, 10:55 PM
Bumpers...

Misskayla
10-21-2006, 03:07 PM
WOW the new one ROCKS too :P

totallylady
10-21-2006, 03:09 PM
Aww that is beautiful. You are a great writer.

MarinCourseSpirit
10-29-2006, 12:48 AM
Wow.. those are good.....

SonicShadowGal
10-29-2006, 01:15 AM
Those are awesome! You should make more :D

MarinCourseSpirit
10-29-2006, 01:59 AM
Yea... i think we all agree.......you should write more

RubyRubia
10-29-2006, 04:36 AM
I don't really like those romantic poems and what not, but I have to say I liked this one. :D Not too cheesy or exaggerated.
Keep on rockin' DG!

Ru Ru~

DinoVan
10-29-2006, 06:02 AM
i love it! sotry of my life...exept the guy heart would be oppisite.

wonderful poem!

♥Van

DarknessGirl
10-30-2006, 09:01 PM
XD

Thanks! I write from whatever im feeling..I write songs and what not.
The 3rd part is very much coming!!! So dont ya worry.
The 3rd part is like both combined...So Yea...

I have some more poems coming, cause alot has been happening in my past weeks! >_<
So no worries...Right?
Yea..

I need to stop talking to myself...