Chapter 1 what it takes
What seemed like a normal day in Disneyland, California. Ashley and Jessi had Jessi's mom take them to Disneyland. "I say the first ride we go on is the Matterhorn." Ashley said happily swinging he blonde hair around.
See Ashley has never been to Disneyland nore DisneyWorld.
"No i think Space mountain." Jessi said to her. "No The HAUNTED MANSION!!!" They both yelled jumping in their seats. "OMG, i am about to pee my pants because i am so exsited!" Ashley yelled. "Lets do the quest for VMK to we could use the things." Jessi turned to Ashley and said. "Okay is there a rest stop near?" Ashley asked Jessi's mom. "We have 2 minuets left can you hold it or are you goin to exsplode??" She asked. "I'l..l.....b....ee.....fi..n.e" She said cracking up.
Chapter 2 What the???
As i did not exsplane in the first chapter Ashley and i are teens that don't care what we are. I have long brown hair and bright blue eyes, Ashley has long blonde hair and green eyes. Now back to the story.
Jessi could not beleive this taffic was backed up in their lane but no in anybody elses!! "I'd raher walk." Jessi said as she looked at Ashley. "She said bribing her mom. "Okay go but wait for me at thefront gate." She said unlocking the doors. "Sweet, your mom rocks Jessi." She said as they where getting out of the car.

Chapter 3, Thats not all
Jessi looked strangly at her mom, she was gone!

Hmm.. interesting story so far. Just a writer to writer tip, try to describe the main character in the first sentence by saying, three girls, too teens and one adult walked into disneyland on what seemed like an ordinary day. Then describe each of the girls, and add some similies.

one question why smilys??????? Adding chapter 2

Well, similies are nice ot have in stories. They take up space too :)