View Full Version : Rushing Water - Story by AwesomeTom


AwesomeTom
06-20-2006, 11:34 PM
Ok so this story sounds like - OMG, why is a boy writing about rushing water, sounds girly -, well lets just say I had this idea, and sent the idea into a publishing company, and even if this does not get published, I wish to show it to you :)

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Chapter 1 - River of Tears


She ran down the hall, tears streaming down her delitace pale face, hoping for a way out. She ran down the hall, turned the corner, and ran into the girls bathroom. Luckily, no girls were in the bathroom to tease her, like usual. She stood, then sat on the heater in the girls bathroon, and began to sob, staining the heater, not knowing or even minding.

Emily, 14 years old, sat, crying with fear, fear of leaving the bathroom, and being teased again. What will it be about this time, maybe her height, maybe her weight, maybe even how silly people thought she was being for crying like a little girl. The truth is, Emily didn't want to grow up, she wanted to be that happy young little girl, who cared for fun only, and school second, but no, she was the girl who focued on her algrebra homework.

Emily, slowly, checking all the corners, dashing her head left and right, checked to make sure no one was approaching, so Emily could race out and make it to her next class without being noted for being late. She saw the hallway was clear, and she began to speed walk down the hall. The speed walk became a jog. The jog became a slow run. Then the slow run because a full blast run. She made it to the class, taking her seat in the second row, first seat on the left side, and she sat, with her tears wiped away, and her facial expressions of fear and sadness wiped away with her tears. Mr. Luongo, Emily's history teacher, began the usual lesson. What a surprise to Emily, today they were learning about the ancient Romans. What a fascinating topic, it really woke Emily up, but then it put her to sleep.

"Emily Thorne, if you think my class is so boring, why don't you teach it?" Mr. Luong questioned Emily. Emily didn't move, she sat, with her eyes shut. Mr. Luong lost his patience, and decided to take a little ruler and tap her desk, or more like smack. Emily, imeddiatley, jolted up, her face as pale as it was before, in a startled reaction."Oh, hey Mr. Luong, is this math or history?" Emily asked in a sobby voice, though Mr. Luong did not notice the sob part of her voice."Emily, I must give you detention, you cannot just fall asleep in my class, again for that matter. Detention is in room 413, do not be late" Mr. Luong exclaimed, finishing his talk with Emily, and ending the class.

Emily walked down the halls, sobbing once again, but holding most of her tears in. She moved down the hall slowly, left and right she paced herself, until she was stopped, by Julie.

"Hey, move out of the way girl.. oh, hello Emily" Julie told Emily in a theatening manner."Please, not today Julie, I had a rough day, and just want to go home.." Emily began to explain and plead to Julie, but Julie interupted her."You had a rough day, trust me, mine was worse, I found out I have summer school this summer" Julie told Emily."Well, that is your own fault really"."I don't need to listen to this" Julie said, in the same threatening voice. Julie picked up Emily and threw her in a locker, shut it, and then put a lock on it, knwoing that Emily could easily escape. Julie left, and all you could hear in the now vacant hallways was Emily, crying, sobbing, and hear the screach noise of her wiping away her tears, in a locker.
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Stacy walked down the hallway, on her cellphone, screaming at herself for getting out of the school late. She heads for the door, but hears an announcement. She must go to the office to meet with the principal. Stacy walks to the office, opens the door, but to her surprise, there is no one there. She looks around, goes into the principals office, and takes a look around. It is all vacant, and she begins to pant, and runs out of the office, running towards the lobby, and its main door. Stacy runs, and is stopped by the janitors giant barrel, which then falls on her, runing her outfit. She gets back up, goes to the front door, and twists the handle.
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Julie walks down the hall, down the 5th and 6th grade hallway, opening all the lockers, and taking personal belongings from the children. She heads for the door to exit the school. She twists the door handle. The door made a click noise, and she turned the knob completely, but to her shocking surprise, the door would not open. She slammed herself against the door, pulled the doorknob, but the door would not open. She was stuck in the school.
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Stacy heard the click noise of the door, but the door would not open. She began to panic and started lunging herself at the door. In the process, she knocked the doorknob off of the door, getting her trapped in the school.

Chapter 2 - Coming Soon -




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Ok once again, need to write a lot more, but I need to eat dinner LOL.

ariellover4life
06-20-2006, 11:38 PM
it is awesome i enjoy it write more

startstart
06-20-2006, 11:38 PM
yea same here, it sounds awesome

AwesomeTom
06-20-2006, 11:40 PM
Ok, I am editing my post for a little more, so stay tuned :)

AwesomeTom
06-24-2006, 03:51 AM
Just a bump to my story. I have edited chapter one. Tomorrow, chapter one will be done :)

PinPoint
06-24-2006, 03:54 AM
I love it!!!! :) :) :)

AwesomeTom
06-24-2006, 03:55 AM
LOL, thank you point, that means alot :)

SuperSnowCutie
06-24-2006, 03:57 AM
Good Story, You should finish it and send it to a publisher:)
I know how it feels to be teased:(
I'm the shortest one in my grade and maybe even the 4th grade (future 5th grade)
Oh, wait there's a shorter boy in the fourth grade.. woohoo!

AwesomeTom
06-24-2006, 03:58 AM
Much, much more to write, I have 13 chapters planned.. LOL

PinPoint
06-24-2006, 03:59 AM
you got a really good start. :)

AwesomeTom
06-24-2006, 04:04 AM
Ok, I edited LOL. A surprise awaits you in chapter one

ariellover4life
06-24-2006, 04:40 AM
awesome story but i am a little confused

AwesomeTom
06-24-2006, 04:21 PM
ariel, what are you confused about?

and to clear things up, in my story these marks: ------ Mean a new time and place has occured in the story.

ariellover4life
06-24-2006, 04:23 PM
oh it is i just dont get the part were she got locked in the locker and then it went to the other girl but you just told e so

AwesomeTom
06-24-2006, 04:26 PM
LOL, at least it was fixed :)

ariellover4life
06-24-2006, 04:31 PM
thx i love your story

xxChevelleAddict
06-24-2006, 08:20 PM
Again, try not to advertise Ariel >_<

Great story Tom, keep it up.

ariellover4life
06-24-2006, 11:33 PM
i know but can you stop being mean and there i fixed it

AwesomeTom
06-25-2006, 02:01 AM
Ok everyone, I need to add a small section to chapter one, and tomorrow, I will begin chapter 2.

liljesi
08-23-2006, 04:24 AM
awesome story!
wow .. a lot of people here are really talented writers. (you being one of them ;))
.. keep writing! i look forward to reading the rest!


-liljesi