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Okay so, I took about an hour to write this poem. Brainstorming, writing, editing, writing, more editing, more writing, then to the point where I'm sated. Tell me if you like it or not, comments greatly appreciated.



Oh, how I dread in my young days of sorrow
Feeling my death and yet, a path worthy to follow
I'm done with these endeavors, but please
I want to be done forever, done with ease

He tries, tries to ask but I choose not to answer
Of course it's lies, but what could be the matter?
I wish not anyone to know what I want, and what I dream
But how can I not, oh so difficult is what it seems

I want to scream, so loud that everyone can hear
Oh but it's a dream, so how will anyone ever fear?
So I'll remember, I may find a way out with steady pace
So I don't ever, ever have to see his deceiving face

Is it a crime, an impossible thing to have faith?
Oh look at the time, guess I'll just have to wait
Then it's all over, with regrets I start again
If I may find a lucky clover, to make my heart mend

Eyes full of fire with a burn so light
How could it tire, this doesn't seem right
Oh so it may seem like, I live in a tyranny
But how can I fight, oh how I love the irony

Bump...anyone like it?

It's a nice poem :D I like how it flows along.

Oh my goodness wow! Great job! *applauds*

Wow, nice poem!

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Nice job!
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I like it ! Nice detail !

Thanks for the comments!

Bumping this. :)

wow great poem i think you have a talent

Thanks. :)

Bravo! {Applauds!!}

Even better, put it to music and it could be a #1 hit song!
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Lol thank you. :)